The visuals give compelling evidence for the PSA. I wonder about mixing up the opacity and visuals in spots. I like the Michelle Obama audio layered over the other visuals. You might try separating the audio and video tracks and then having some visuals more present or just vary those segments. After about 1:25, I wonder about bringing in some more text or materials to complement the visuals. Maybe the M Obama clip can be split up and some of it used in the second half. The irony with the music is a nice touch. It seems like the piece is focused pretty heavily on obesity. I wonder about the smoking/health angle in terms of this focus. I'm also wondering if shortening up the piece might be worth thinking about. Lot's of good materials here. Nice work.
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The visuals give compelling
The visuals give compelling evidence for the PSA. I wonder about mixing up the opacity and visuals in spots. I like the Michelle Obama audio layered over the other visuals. You might try separating the audio and video tracks and then having some visuals more present or just vary those segments. After about 1:25, I wonder about bringing in some more text or materials to complement the visuals. Maybe the M Obama clip can be split up and some of it used in the second half. The irony with the music is a nice touch. It seems like the piece is focused pretty heavily on obesity. I wonder about the smoking/health angle in terms of this focus. I'm also wondering if shortening up the piece might be worth thinking about. Lot's of good materials here. Nice work.