The narration does well at providing information for the piece. The interview clips have great information. I wonder about trimming them and bringing the narration back a bit sooner. The work with Schefter's materials does well at illustrating the narration. And the Bilas work is also strong. You might tie things back more to the larger topic of shifts while discussing these particular examples. I like the compromise segment. I wonder a bit about how closely that is linked to the Bilas and Shefter segments. Maybe a bit more of a transition so that we see more poor quality and they don't come off as being painted with the same brush. As it wraps up, I wonder a bit about how the closing points are related to the opening. Rather than a history of the shifts, really we might be looking at more of a piece about the benefits and challenges of the current moment, which the piece does well at laying out. This was interesting. You can cut the ghost piece at the end to trim out the hanging time at the end. Nice work.
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Length
Um, the video is supposed to be cut off after 6 minutes...
The narration does well at
The narration does well at providing information for the piece. The interview clips have great information. I wonder about trimming them and bringing the narration back a bit sooner. The work with Schefter's materials does well at illustrating the narration. And the Bilas work is also strong. You might tie things back more to the larger topic of shifts while discussing these particular examples. I like the compromise segment. I wonder a bit about how closely that is linked to the Bilas and Shefter segments. Maybe a bit more of a transition so that we see more poor quality and they don't come off as being painted with the same brush. As it wraps up, I wonder a bit about how the closing points are related to the opening. Rather than a history of the shifts, really we might be looking at more of a piece about the benefits and challenges of the current moment, which the piece does well at laying out. This was interesting. You can cut the ghost piece at the end to trim out the hanging time at the end. Nice work.