There is a nice feel and flow. I wonder about the second text screen and the word "real" connections. In terms of argumentation, it might be more persuasive to pitch with a bit more accommodation to those who value their online connections and think of them as real as well, so something like "connections and experience you might not find online" could deliver a similar point without putting some folks off--arguing for balance. The imagery and flow of the second half is working well. Nice job.
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There is a nice feel and flow
There is a nice feel and flow. I wonder about the second text screen and the word "real" connections. In terms of argumentation, it might be more persuasive to pitch with a bit more accommodation to those who value their online connections and think of them as real as well, so something like "connections and experience you might not find online" could deliver a similar point without putting some folks off--arguing for balance. The imagery and flow of the second half is working well. Nice job.