The opening clip does well to set up your topic. It might be good to edit it down a bit to bring your own voice or guidance into the piece more strongly. This will help when the other materials come in as the viewer will be used to more guidance. Signposting things for the viewers will help people take in key points and maybe allow more specific points to be made. The mix of materials is nice but some context might be provided--for instance, the reference to the TAGS research could be set up for people who don't know what might be going on with it. Similar connections might be spelled out related to things like emotional decisions, fear, etc. I like the topic and materials. Adding more narration or textual signposting will make it stronger.
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This is extremely cool and I
This is extremely cool and I love the topic. Nice Job.
The opening clip does well to
The opening clip does well to set up your topic. It might be good to edit it down a bit to bring your own voice or guidance into the piece more strongly. This will help when the other materials come in as the viewer will be used to more guidance. Signposting things for the viewers will help people take in key points and maybe allow more specific points to be made. The mix of materials is nice but some context might be provided--for instance, the reference to the TAGS research could be set up for people who don't know what might be going on with it. Similar connections might be spelled out related to things like emotional decisions, fear, etc. I like the topic and materials. Adding more narration or textual signposting will make it stronger.